Task: The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Task Achievement: The response covers the requirements of the task, presenting an overview and specific data. However, some data is inaccurately reported, such as '1,000 thousands' instead of '1,000 thousand' or '1 million'.
Areas for Improvement
Data Accuracy Issues: Inaccurate use of 'thousands' instead of 'thousand' or 'million'., Some figures are slightly off, e.g., '800 thousands' instead of '800 thousand'.
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Ensure accurate use of numerical terms, such as 'thousand' and 'million'.
Improve grammatical accuracy, focusing on subject-verb agreement and pluralization.
Enhance lexical variety to avoid repetition and improve clarity.
5 Grammar & Accuracy Issues Found
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From the chart, we can see that part-time study was much more popular than full-time study in all three periods. Also, more women started studying in later years but mens numbers stayed quite similar.
For men students, about 1,000 thousands were doing part-time courses in 1970/71. This number went down to around 850 thousands in 1980/81, then it increased again to 900 thousands in 1990/91, the full-time male students was much less - only about 100 thousands in 1970/71, then 150 thousands in 1980/81, and finally 220 thousands in 1990/91.
Women students showed different patterns. In 1970/71, there was 700 thousands women in part-time education. This stayed about the same (800 thousands) in 1980/81, but then it increased a lot to 1,100 thousands in 1990/91. Full-time women students was very small in 1970/71 - only 50 thousands. But this grew to 200 thousands in 1980/81 and 230 thousands in 1990/91 which were very significant.
The most interesting thing is that by 1990/91, women had more students than men in total they overtaked men completely. Before this, men was always more than women in further education. On the contrary, the situation changed dramatically in the last period.
In conclusion, the chart shows that part-time education is more popular and womens participation increased dramatically over these 20 years while men stayed quite stable, this trends shows important changes in British education system.
The possessive form of 'men' is 'men's' to indicate that the numbers belong to men.
The subject 'students' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' to match in number.
The subject 'students' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' to match in number.
The subject 'men' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' to match in number.
The definite article 'the' is needed before 'British education system' to specify a particular system.
2 Punctuation & Mechanics Issues Found
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From the chart, we can see that part-time study was much more popular than full-time study in all three periods. Also, more women started studying in later years but mens numbers stayed quite similar.
For men students, about 1,000 thousands were doing part-time courses in 1970/71. This number went down to around 850 thousands in 1980/81, then it increased again to 900 thousands in 1990/91, the full-time male students was much less - only about 100 thousands in 1970/71, then 150 thousands in 1980/81, and finally 220 thousands in 1990/91.
Women students showed different patterns. In 1970/71, there was 700 thousands women in part-time education. This stayed about the same (800 thousands) in 1980/81, but then it increased a lot to 1,100 thousands in 1990/91. Full-time women students was very small in 1970/71 - only 50 thousands. But this grew to 200 thousands in 1980/81 and 230 thousands in 1990/91 which were very significant.
The most interesting thing is that by 1990/91, women had more students than men in total they overtaked men completely. Before this, men was always more than women in further education. On the contrary, the situation changed dramatically in the last period.
In conclusion, the chart shows that part-time education is more popular and womens participation increased dramatically over these 20 years while men stayed quite stable, this trends shows important changes in British education system.
A period is needed to separate two independent clauses for clarity and correct punctuation.
The sentence should start with a capital letter, and 'trends' is plural, so 'these' and 'show' should be used.
14 Sentence Structure & Style Issues Found
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From the chart, we can see that part-time study was much more popular than full-time study in all three periods. Also, more women started studying in later years but mens numbers stayed quite similar.
For men students, about 1,000 thousands were doing part-time courses in 1970/71. This number went down to around 850 thousands in 1980/81, then it increased again to 900 thousands in 1990/91, the full-time male students was much less - only about 100 thousands in 1970/71, then 150 thousands in 1980/81, and finally 220 thousands in 1990/91.
Women students showed different patterns. In 1970/71, there was 700 thousands women in part-time education. This stayed about the same (800 thousands) in 1980/81, but then it increased a lot to 1,100 thousands in 1990/91. Full-time women students was very small in 1970/71 - only 50 thousands. But this grew to 200 thousands in 1980/81 and 230 thousands in 1990/91 which were very significant.
The most interesting thing is that by 1990/91, women had more students than men in total they overtaked men completely. Before this, men was always more than women in further education. On the contrary, the situation changed dramatically in the last period.
In conclusion, the chart shows that part-time education is more popular and womens participation increased dramatically over these 20 years while men stayed quite stable, this trends shows important changes in British education system.
The phrase '1,000 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '1,000,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '850 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '850,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '900 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '900,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '100 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '100,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '150 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '150,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '220 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '220,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '700 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '700,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '800 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '800,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '1,100 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '1,100,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '50 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '50,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '200 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '200,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The phrase '230 thousands' is unclear and non-standard. Using '230,000' provides clarity and is the correct numerical expression.
The verb 'overtaked' is incorrect. The correct past tense form is 'overtook', which improves grammatical accuracy.
The subject 'trends' is plural, so the verb should be 'show' to maintain subject-verb agreement, improving grammatical accuracy.
From the chart, we can see that part-time study was much more popular than full-time study in all three periods. Also, more women started studying in later years but mens numbers stayed quite similar.
For men students, about 1,000 thousands were doing part-time courses in 1970/71. This number went down to around 850 thousands in 1980/81, then it increased again to 900 thousands in 1990/91, the full-time male students was much less - only about 100 thousands in 1970/71, then 150 thousands in 1980/81, and finally 220 thousands in 1990/91.
Women students showed different patterns. In 1970/71, there was 700 thousands women in part-time education. This stayed about the same (800 thousands) in 1980/81, but then it increased a lot to 1,100 thousands in 1990/91. Full-time women students was very small in 1970/71 - only 50 thousands. But this grew to 200 thousands in 1980/81 and 230 thousands in 1990/91 which were very significant.
The most interesting thing is that by 1990/91, women had more students than men in total they overtaked men completely. Before this, men was always more than women in further education. On the contrary, the situation changed dramatically in the last period.
In conclusion, the chart shows that part-time education is more popular and womens participation increased dramatically over these 20 years while men stayed quite stable, this trends shows important changes in British education system.
No Vocabulary & Cohesion Issues
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